Edits

 Today I finished all of my final edits. I am now starting to write my updated querry letter since I changed my publication. Throughout this process I have also noticed some strengths and weaknesses. Not only did I change tenses throughout the paper, I made it sound more like an advertisement than an informative article for a magazine. After fixing these things I feel my piece had a stronger voice. Another strength was my writing style, atleast my voice didnt change for the worst, it changed for the better. I also used an equal amount of heat and light so the readers werent bumbarded with my opinion or with too much research. Overall, I thought this was a great way to get to know myself better as a writer and I cant wait to read the finished piece to the class! After my presentation I will be posting my article on here so that you all can read the finished version. Thanks again for everyones help. Im going to enjoy the rest of the snow day now!

Bye

Workshop

Well, that workshop went well. I got some good feedback on my conclusion, which sounded like an advertisement. I also got some information on how I need to add more research and more detail when it comes to types of fish. They liked the personal experiences I added in the article. I also changed my publication, because the way i wrote the paper, doesnt really fit Orion Magazine, so im going to be sending this to On The Water Magazine that my friend Molly introduced me to tonight!! This magazine is better because its for all fisherman in New England, and they will no more about the subject than me giving them so much research based material. I just finished the edits and changed the conclusion around so it hopefully doesnt sound so much like an advertisement anymore and sent it to Molly for her to edit again for me. I am thankful to her because since we are both interested in fish we can relate and help each other more one on one. I will be updating this more and more throughout the next week as I make more edits and finish up the project. Talk to you all soon!!

Todays Workshop

Today I am getting my 7 page paper workshopped by half of my class. I am feeling pretty confident, except i no my tense screws up along the way, and I might not have an equal amount of heat and light. Hopefully my class mates can help me figure out a way to change things so my paper can be publishable. I will write back after the workshop is over today at 4pm. Talk to you all then!