Edits

 Today I finished all of my final edits. I am now starting to write my updated querry letter since I changed my publication. Throughout this process I have also noticed some strengths and weaknesses. Not only did I change tenses throughout the paper, I made it sound more like an advertisement than an informative article for a magazine. After fixing these things I feel my piece had a stronger voice. Another strength was my writing style, atleast my voice didnt change for the worst, it changed for the better. I also used an equal amount of heat and light so the readers werent bumbarded with my opinion or with too much research. Overall, I thought this was a great way to get to know myself better as a writer and I cant wait to read the finished piece to the class! After my presentation I will be posting my article on here so that you all can read the finished version. Thanks again for everyones help. Im going to enjoy the rest of the snow day now!

Bye

Workshop

Well, that workshop went well. I got some good feedback on my conclusion, which sounded like an advertisement. I also got some information on how I need to add more research and more detail when it comes to types of fish. They liked the personal experiences I added in the article. I also changed my publication, because the way i wrote the paper, doesnt really fit Orion Magazine, so im going to be sending this to On The Water Magazine that my friend Molly introduced me to tonight!! This magazine is better because its for all fisherman in New England, and they will no more about the subject than me giving them so much research based material. I just finished the edits and changed the conclusion around so it hopefully doesnt sound so much like an advertisement anymore and sent it to Molly for her to edit again for me. I am thankful to her because since we are both interested in fish we can relate and help each other more one on one. I will be updating this more and more throughout the next week as I make more edits and finish up the project. Talk to you all soon!!

Todays Workshop

Today I am getting my 7 page paper workshopped by half of my class. I am feeling pretty confident, except i no my tense screws up along the way, and I might not have an equal amount of heat and light. Hopefully my class mates can help me figure out a way to change things so my paper can be publishable. I will write back after the workshop is over today at 4pm. Talk to you all then!

Done!!

Well, I just put the last finishing touches on my article. It is about 7 pages, and over 2000 words. I think it came out very good. I wrote it from my personal aspect and added in some research as well. I also added some info on what people can do to help protect the Long Island Sound from getting worse than it already is. I found an interesting organization's article called the Long Island Sound Study. It was started in 1985 by the Department of Environmental Protections Agencies in New York and Connecticut. They have only just started making cooperative efforts to focus on the overall ecosystems being affected by climate change. Even though this is a bi-state partnership, it consists of federal and state agencies, user groups, concerned organizations, and individuals dedicated to restoring and protecting the Sound. I am thinking about joining this organization when I graduate from Unity in December, because I am very interested in helping protect the Sound considering I grew up fishing there. More and more and I go there things are changing, and I cant take seeing it. It makes me so depressed and disgusted. Just knowing that my kids might not be able to go fishing there if things dont get better soon makes me so mad because some of my favorite childhood memories were there and I want theres to be there too. Now all I have left to do is workshop with my class and get some feedback on things that need to be changed and comments on things that fit well. I really hope they like it, and I hope I can get this published at some point. I have a strong passion for the Long Island Sound and hope to some day be a big part in helping to protect it. I will write back soon.

Been a Long Time

Its been a long time since Ive writen, got a lot of family stuff going on. But this thanksgiving break, I started writing my article. So far I have almost 3 pages single spaced, and im trying to incorporate my personal experience along with some research. I feel im going a pretty good job so far, but well see when I re-read and edit it.

Faciliation

My presentation went very well. Everyone seemed interested in my topic. I got the class involved and they all gave me some really good suggestions. I am thankful for all of the help and hope I will get the same feedback during our workshop groups. Now I am gathering research and deciding exactly what pieces of facts I want to incorportate into my article.

Presentation Time!!

It is time to put all of my information and pictures together to come up with a class facilitation for Monday. I started out with a slide of where the LIS is located with a map on it. The next slide is why it is important to me and other people or wildlife. After this, I go into explaining what's happening to it. I explain how the water temperatures have changed, which makes for different marine wildlife species. This slide transitions into the different types of fish that are native to the LIS and that every fisherman is used to catching. There are a couple slides on those and then it goes into the species that are more common now that climate change has taken a toll. There is also a slide for the invasive species and how they are effecting our "locals." Then i go into talking about how we can help. We obviously have to lower the amount of carbon emissions in and around the LIS. The two most important things we can do in our own homes is use florescent ligh bulbs (each one will reduce CO2 by 100lbs/year, and keep your home thermostat at 65-68 during the day and 55-58 at night (will reduce CO2 by 1400lbs/year/home). My last slide talks about how I need the classes help. I need suggestions on how I can incorporate all of my facts, quotes, details and my personal experiences fishing in the LIS into my article without having an unequal amount of each. My goal is to write like Ginger Strand did and have an equal amount of everything. This way it wont seem like a personal narrative or a research paper, it will include alittle bit of both. Any suggestions?